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Then back to the living dream by ~Spotlight-Bitey:iconSpotlight-Bitey:





Then back to the living dream

There is a fragile beauty in your shiver
And in the visible waves of your emotions.
Your ephemeral taste drifts through my world
Like your perfume, mockery of your scent.
Your predatory kiss lingers like a pulse through
Me, invisible subject of your delicate love.
Your artificially soft and golden breath of hair
Swirls about my lips like the music of your uncertainty.
Your body trapped against my hips brings reality close
Just for a second...
Then back to the living dream of hearing your voice
In the loving whispers of the real golden sunset.
©2005-2009 ~Spotlight-Bitey
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Author's Comments

A poem involving a girl or a boy - I didn't make that clear. I don't need to. I really hated doing this, but I've put this into the 'erotic' category purely because it has an obviously sexual undertone. This is one of my more developed poems...interesting that it's one of my less mature-sounding ones. The sheer amount of possessive pronouns (compared to the one personal pronoun) is deliberate, by the way. I'm not just a bad writer. XD

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I absolutely loved this! To me, it seemed quite different from the rest of your poetry that I've read (which I have also loved), but still has that same underlying tone that is purely your work.

Verrrrrry atmospheric, and very real at the same time, to such a degree that it makes me feel as if I'm there.

Haha, I wouldn't have noticed all the possessive pronouns if you hadn't mentioned it, but you pulled it off brilliantly. :)
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Seeing as you don't comment on any of the stuff I want you to, I'm going to comment on this :p Unfortunately there's only one thing I can think of to describe it; beautiful. So there you go, I commented, maybe you should return the favour! xxxxxx :hug:

Really is lovely.

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